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20 June 2006 @ 08:45 am
Extra: Fic: 'Deleted Scene.'  
Title: Amidst the Forgotten Stars: Deleted Scene.
Fandom: Star Wars
Rating: (G)
Time Period: Between tPM and AotC.
Summary: The scene that no one saw.

Author's Note: This was inspired by a fanvideo by mya_scarlet and partially from a conversation I had with emiv, when I initially began writing the 'fic for the challenge at obiwan_padme. It's 'quick & dirty' (see the F. A. Q. for the definition of that term) due to my laughing when writing. DVDs have deleted scenes; why not 'fics?

Disclaimer
All characters contained herein are the intellectual property of Lucas; I am not affiliated with nor endorsed by him.

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A breath expelled as he releases the kiss, blue-grey meeting brown eyes become darker and larger with the captured reflection of the stars now forgotten. He smiles. The outer robe slides from his arms, falling to the floor, dramatically.

He grins, the hilt of his lightsabre in hand.

A curl brushes over his forehead.

He steps backward, two paces, and his head tilts, down and to the left, his eyes on the ground and the hilt is brought to his lips. “Does she love me? I want to know!” His grin hadn’t wavered and his gaze shot up, settling on the young Senator who was now watching him with surprise.

She hadn’t known Obi-Wan could sing, or even knew a contemporary song. Anakin knowing such a song, she could have easily envisioned but not Obi-Wan, with his serious demeanour. He surprised her, now, as each minute passed.

“How can I tell if she loves me so? Is it in her eyes?” Much enthusiasm as he slid along the floor of the room, the lightsabre having been a swift improvisation; part of Jedi training, after all, to use one’s lightsabre to such a purpose. His foot kicked out before him, then the other before he spun before he slid along the floor again and landed on his knees before her. “Oh, no you’ll be deceived! If you want to know if she loves you so, it’s in her kiss!”

The lightsabre fell to the floor with a clatter and she was tugged into his lap as his hands cradled her face and he pressed her to the wall again, his lips again claiming hers and muffling the laughter that’d arisen from the sight of usually restrained Jedi Knight sliding across the floor.
 
 
 
"MJ": Obidala #4londongirl27 on June 19th, 2006 11:52 pm (UTC)
*LOL* Yeah, Anne had a point! It would've been nice to see some dancing Obi-wan footage. And, OMG . . . you put it to hilarious use here! Some authors would take the next logical step from your last fic and do something sexy or sultry -- but no! You completely surprised me by doing a comedic follow-up. :D Now, I can definitely envision Obi-wan dancing everytime I hear that song. :) You did a great job describing his dance moves. *giggle*

I can just picture Padme looking at him, thinking,"Eh, has he gone mad?" For me, the ending has to be one of the cutest Obidala moments I've ever read -- with them kissing and laughing at the same time. :)
F. J.: Three candlesmorethanacandle on June 19th, 2006 11:59 pm (UTC)
Some authors would take the next logical step from your last fic and do something sexy or sultry -- but no! You completely surprised me by doing a comedic follow-up. :D
You can still have that sultry/sexy follow-up in your mind, if you'd like! For this, we can blame my latest Star Wars acquisition.

Besides, as the author's note says: if movies can have deleted scenes, why not 'fics?!

Now, I can definitely envision Obi-wan dancing everytime I hear that song. :)
Good! I'll never be able to listen to that song without picturing this, sincerely, so I'm very glad not to be alone in this!

You did a great job describing his dance moves. *giggle*
Thank you - I wasn't certain I captured his dancing at all, and it was based off a combination of what I saw in mya_scarlet's fanvideo. After all, Ewan played Obi-Wan and I can't lose his sense of rhythm!

I can just picture Padme looking at him, thinking,"Eh, has he gone mad?" For me, the ending has to be one of the cutest Obidala moments I've ever read -- with them kissing and laughing at the same time. :)
I'm glad you liked it. I had a great deal of fun writing it; I was busy laughing so much when I wrote it that I'm really surprised it made coherent sense! It's 'quick & dirty' purely due to my laughing so hard by the end of it and when I reread it.
Pumpkin Seedjeedai on June 20th, 2006 12:55 am (UTC)
That was so fun! I loved it. But what video was it based off of? I'd like to see it.
F. J.: lantern & candlesmorethanacandle on June 20th, 2006 01:05 am (UTC)
I'm glad you enjoyed it!

It's not posted anywhere, publicly, unless mya_scarlet did so, and I was unaware. I like to give credit, if inspired, by something someone else has made and to state what it was so they know what it was that sparked the inspiration.

The fanvideo was a series of clips from various Ewan films, to the Cher version of the song that Obi-Wan sang in the 'fic.
Armchair DM: Carson: No no no AIEEE!!armchairdm on June 20th, 2006 01:16 am (UTC)
Oh ye gods...
... That about sums up my thoughts on this. It's hilarious. I'll never be able to listen to that song again; in -any- of its versions. Thank you. I needed that, believe it or not. It's pure comedy, which there isn't enough of, in -any- fandom.
F. J.: Three candlesmorethanacandle on June 20th, 2006 01:45 am (UTC)
Re: Oh ye gods...
You're welcome?

I'm glad that its humour worked for you, even if I seemed to ruin a perfectly good song for you.

I'll never be able to listen to that song again; in -any- of its versions.
Not be able to listen without thinking of this 'fic?
Mya Scarletmya_scarlet on June 20th, 2006 09:47 pm (UTC)
OMG! I was thinking to myself, hmm, exactly which video, and I never expected that one! Hilarious, and totally wonderful! Obi-wan combined with Ewan's charm is irresistible ;). That's one of my favourite moments in the vid too, I'm grinning from ear to ear :)
F. J.: lantern & candlesmorethanacandle on June 20th, 2006 10:07 pm (UTC)
I'm really glad you liked it! I was speaking with emiv, and I eyed the latest Star Wars acquisition, eyed your vid. and remembered there was no Obi-Wan footage and it all just fell together!

Hilarious, and totally wonderful! Obi-wan combined with Ewan's charm is irresistible ;).
He really, really is! Ewan brought charm to the role and when I was writing, I had the vid. playing and was glancing between it and the notebook as I wrote to ensure I really did bring some of his charm to it.

That's one of my favourite moments in the vid too, I'm grinning from ear to ear :)
I'm glad to hear that! This 'fic, for various reasons, seems to be having that effect on people and I'm really glad that you liked it, since it was your vid. that inspired it.
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F. J.: Three candlesmorethanacandle on June 20th, 2006 10:59 pm (UTC)
I was expecting some sort of romantic or sexified scene...but this was so unpredictable.
Everyone seemed to expect that, after how Amidst the Forgettn Stars ended. I'm pleased this wasn't expected and that it's brought a lot of smiles, grins and downright laughter for people.

I could just picture them laughing as they were about to kiss. It was so funny. Wonderful job, my dear.
Thank you, very much. I wasn't absolutely certain how it'd be received, but it seems to have worked well for everyone.
kenobifan: AU my asslealynnkenobi on June 22nd, 2007 03:35 pm (UTC)
LOL.. that was adorable.

Oh and...AND I FOUND YOUR OBIDALA STORIES!! :D
F. J.: Christmas Candlesmorethanacandle on June 23rd, 2007 03:07 am (UTC)
This particular 'fic has earned the nickname of 'Shoop Shoop Obi!' due to the song sung within the 'fic itself, which was adapted from The Shoop Shoop song. It was particularly fun to write and only took me five minutes, total. The rest of the time was spent ensuring I'd captured the rhythm of the movements.

Oh and...AND I FOUND YOUR OBIDALA STORIES!! :D
They were always there! It's why I link at the side of the journal to the memories since I try to make everything as easy to find as possible.