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08 April 2006 @ 10:38 pm
Fic: 'A Moment Of Truth.'  
Title: A Moment Of Truth.
Fandom: Star Wars
Rating: (PG)
Time Period: RotS - on the Invisible Hand.
Summary: Anakin's 'moment of truth', on the Invisible Hand.

Author's Note: This is icon inspired; I was looking at a random icon post on sweet__tea, saw the icon and the story that follows is the result. As a warning, this is one of my 'quick & dirty' 'fics (for reference as to what these are, see F. A. Q.).

Disclaimer
All characters contained herein are the intellectual property of Lucas; I am not affiliated with nor endorsed by him.

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With each victory of the light, it is the dark that wins.
‘Revenge of the Sith’ – Matthew Stover, pg 11


Azure and crimson blades are crossed and the Sith is on his knees, caught between them. Red and blue.

Sith and Jedi.

It is in this moment Anakin Skywalker will discover a truth about himself, make a decision that will forever dominate his destiny.

Jedi and Sith.

The blades are reflected in Dooku’s eyes and Anakin doesn’t see a Sith in this moment. What he sees is a man suddenly aware of his age and fear is seen, sparked abruptly by the hissed words from the man shackled to the large chair that commands the room, directing events as though this were a play and the Jedi and Sith merely actors.

Kill him.

A fierce whisper that permits Anakin to do what it is he desires most – to end the war. A fierce whisper that gives permission to kill the man who took his hand three years ago on Geonosis. A fierce whisper that permits justice to be meted in the name of Jabiim, Muunilist and Praesiltyn.

In this moment, as the plasma bolts and starfighter debris streak past the viewport and the lightsabres cause oxygen to sizzle, Anakin Skywalker has to decide.

Red.

Blue.

He remembers Geonosis. Jabiim. Aargonar. Praesiltyn. All the fear. The absolute terror. The lost life.

The figurehead now kneels, his fate held in the steadiness of Anakin’s hands. One slip and his life is lost.

Blue eyes focus on the Sith. It is not the Jedi way, to kill. Justice is sought and Dooku’s justice should be in the hands of the Republic.

The voice of the Republic has given permission, of the finality of Dooku’s fate. His brow furrows from indecision.

Jedi.

Sith.

He is not the Jedi he should be.

The blades cross. The body falls as the head rolls along the floor.

This was not the Jedi way. The truth of his future has been revealed. He just doesn’t know it yet.
 
 
 
rabbitmagerabbitmage on April 9th, 2006 03:24 am (UTC)
Very, very nicely written. It is just a moment, but it really speaks to the impact that single moment had in the course of Anakin's life. It makes me want to go back and watch the movie again, just to look at the scene.
F. J.: Three candlesmorethanacandle on April 9th, 2006 04:50 am (UTC)
Thank you!

My primary concern was in judging the length of this. Too long and it loses the potency of the 'moment'. Too little and it's not worth writing.

Yes, go watch it!
Mya Scarletmya_scarlet on April 9th, 2006 08:41 pm (UTC)
I love the way you took this moment and expanded on it, just enough, not too much. Although I know this clip well I hadn't thought about the symbolism of the red and blue blades, so I'll have to go watch it again...
F. J.: lantern & candlesmorethanacandle on April 9th, 2006 09:09 pm (UTC)
Thank you, very much.

It was actually while watching your latest vid., after seeing the icon for the story, that the symbolism really struck me.
emiv: Queen Amidalaemiv on April 11th, 2006 04:52 am (UTC)
*dies of happiness*

First off, the very idea that an icon of mine inspired you to write a fic—I am ecstatic, and honored, and somewhat giddy!

This is an amazing ficclet—it stretches out a brief moment of time, but it doesn’t slow it down. There is a constant sense of immediacy, which works well in keeping up the tension—even though I knew what happens, I was still anxious as I read, wondering if maybe things would end differently.

Some random comments:

a man suddenly aware of his age and fear

This is a perfect description of Dooku’s face from the movie.

Jabiim, Muunilist and Praesiltyn.

I have no idea the background of these places, but this was so seamless and well written that I got a good sense of what happen there and was completely convinced that they were canon locations.

as the plasma bolts and starfighter debris streak past the viewport and the lightsabres cause oxygen to sizzle

These are great descriptions and they also remind the reader of timeframe and setting for this little scene.

The voice of the Republic

I loved that you—or rather Anakin—refers to Palpatine this way. He doesn’t say the head of the Republic, but the voice. That, to me, is quite telling of Anakin opinions on Palpatine at this point and is also a bit foreshadowing. Loved it.

He is not the Jedi he should be.

I really liked how this line fit into the overall storyline of RoTS. He says this same thing to Padmé later on, but this is the moment he actually realizes it for himself. Great continuity.

Some very slight constructive criticism: Some of omniscient narration was a little jarring, and kind of took me out of the story for a second. Two examples: It is in this moment Anakin Skywalker will discover a truth about himself, make a decision that will forever dominate his destiny. & The truth of his future has been revealed. He just doesn’t know it yet. These seemed to take some of the dramatic tension away from the story, and the rest of the writing is so strong that these aren’t really needed.

At any rate, for a “quick and dirty” story, as you call it, this was amazingly well put together and written.
F. J.: Three candlesmorethanacandle on April 11th, 2006 05:08 am (UTC)
First off, the very idea that an icon of mine inspired you to write a fic—I am ecstatic, and honored, and somewhat giddy!
I didn't think it would inspire such a reaction! But, when I saw the icon in your random icon post the other night? This story just came to mind; I think I paused long enough to do some quick background reading and to watch the start of RotS - the lead up to that moment and then watched Dooku's death. And then wrote the story.

All based purely from your icon. It was an odd li'l spark of imagination, and I'm thrilled that you didn't mind!

Thank you, very much, for the concrit and the feedback; I was awed to see this comment and had an immediate moment of 'SQUEE!' (because, I sincerely love comments like this). Thank you for taking the time to write it.

With regard to Jabiim, Muunilist and Praesiltyn? These events took place in the EU and accounted as some of the bloodiest battles amongst the Wars, which was why I had added them. I don't know much about Muunilist, but Jabiim was bloody and brutal, as was Praesiltyn. At Jabiim? Aankin 'lost' Obi-Wan and was without his Master for a while. It was events at Praesiltyn that earned Anakin his rank of Jedi Knight.

I couldn't not mention these events, especially Jabiim and Praesiltyn. They had an impact on Anakin - he lost friends and his Master at Jabiim (Obi-Wan later escaped his captors) and Praesiltyn was bloody, brutal and where he earned his 'stripes' as a Knight.

Some of omniscient narration was a little jarring, and kind of took me out of the story for a second.
Thank you, for pointing that out. If the story had actually been edited, I had considered taking those out, but since this was 'quick & dirty', I left them in due to uncertainty.

At any rate, for a “quick and dirty” story, as you call it, this was amazingly well put together and written.
Thank you! ... all told? The story took a total of five minutes to write and another few minutes after that to type.

I'm ecstatic that it seemed well put-together and written for you. My concern with this story was that it would seem really rushed, due to length or that I would drag out the moment.
Lumy: AniPalpySmallluminations on March 10th, 2008 05:11 am (UTC)
Mmmmmm, this is quick and dirty? I like!

I'm a sucker for Anakin/Palpatine stories (romantic or otherwise)... and this scene looks like it could easily be inserted right into the novel. That's a great moment for Anakin. (well, for writers to write him; not for him personally!)

*comments on fic 2 years late*
F. J.: lantern & candlesmorethanacandle on March 10th, 2008 05:18 am (UTC)
Mmmmmm, this is quick and dirty? I like!
Thank you! I don't usually write them often but when they result in something like this 'fic, I find myself not minding them so much. Especially when the balance of the 'fic is 'delicate', for lack of a better word.

and this scene looks like it could easily be inserted right into the novel.
That's a wonderful compliment; thank you! It was my hope this could be inserted into either movie or novel.

*comments on fic 2 years late*
Comments are always welcome; it took me a moment to realise this was written in 2006.
Lumy: AniIWantMoreluminations on March 10th, 2008 05:20 am (UTC)
You're welcome! And hehe, time sure flies, doesn't it?
F. J.: lantern & candlesmorethanacandle on March 10th, 2008 05:25 am (UTC)
And hehe, time sure flies, doesn't it?
It does! (As I've learned in the past couple months.)