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31 January 2010 @ 05:05 am
Fic: ‘Brief impertinence.’  
Title: Brief impertinence.
Fandom: Star Wars
Rating: (G)
Time Period: During tPM: on the way to Tatooine.
Summary: In a room somewhere on the Queen’s vessel, an unexpected conversation.

Author's Note: This is quick ‘n’ dirty (for definition see the F. A. Q. or check this post for the definition).

I can’t remember the last time I’ve written a younger Padmé and I just wanted to have fun with this scene that I could picture very clearly in my mind. Don’t expect her to be a carbon copy of Padmé from tPM: I’m not promising that she will be very faithful to the film (I’ve not watched tPM in a very long time) and this was just a bit of chuckle-worthy fun.

Disclaimer
All characters contained herein are the intellectual property of Lucas; I am not affiliated with nor endorsed by him.


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The rag in her hand was filthy but the R2 unit’s domed head was sparkling. “It was the very least I could do,” she whispered to the astromech, her smile lopsided. “Don’t you feel cleaner?”

A whistle with a low ‘bloop!’ was the only response.

“Do you always speak to the droids you must clean?”

Sitting cross-legged on the floor before the unit, brown eyes rose to meet the blue eyes of one of the Jedi. Padawan, she corrected herself. He was the student to the master, Qui-Gon. She rested her arms along the sides of her lap. “Do you not do so?”

“They are droids.”

“Who have intelligence and feelings as do other sentient beings in the galaxy.”

“Brooop!”

“Are you telling me you can understand what he says?”

“Can you not?” With difficulty, she suppressed her impulse to surrender to her amusement; at the least, a slight crooked smile formed.

“Droids are to serve the purposes of their creators and those they serve.”

“Freeep!”

“Pay no attention,” she patted the droid’s head; she wiped away the palm print left by her hand. “You are a hero and no one, not even Jedi Padawans, can say differently.”

He could sense her amusement and folded his arms under the dark outer robe. “Good night, m’lady.”

“Good night, Obi-Wan.” Finally, her eyes rose from the droid and to the Padawan. “Forgive my impertinence. I do not mean to undervalue your aid or skills as they have been used in the defence of my –” a very small pause “- Queen.”

“There was no offence given.”

“Shall I clean your quarters now I am done?”

He bowed, stepped back once and turned, departing down the corridor immediately behind him. When he was certain not to be within the Handmaiden’s earshot, he chuckled quietly before resuming his search for Qui-Gon.
 
 
 
Nataliebriseis_kenobi on January 30th, 2010 07:58 pm (UTC)
That was so cute! I love how Padmé was so cheeky to Obi-Wan, and how he chucked about it afterwards.=D
F. J.: Lantern & Candles: Warmmorethanacandle on January 31st, 2010 11:01 am (UTC)
That was so cute!
Thank you! I wasn't certain how it would be perceived and to read that it was cute makes me smile.

I love how Padmé was so cheeky to Obi-Wan, and how he chucked about it afterwards.=D
I figured he had to appreciate the humour of that entire situation! At least, I hoped!
pronker: obidalaflarepronker on January 31st, 2010 06:53 am (UTC)
R2 was saying pithy retorts, no doubt. Cute!
F. J.: Lanterns: Warmmorethanacandle on January 31st, 2010 11:20 am (UTC)
R2 was saying pithy retorts, no doubt.
And possibly rude as well.

Cute!
Thank you!
Ana: obidala tpm promokicho14 on January 31st, 2010 03:39 pm (UTC)
Aaaw, it was such a wonderful ficlet :) And I love the way R2 backed up Padme's words with his whistling :P I bet he was saying rather colorful Alderanian curses :D

I don't know why, but I always choose this as a setting when I vid TPM Padme and Obi. It's just that this scene (had it actually existed) holds a lot of potential for cute and cheeky meetings between our OTP :D

Great job on the ficlet, darling :))
F. J.: Three candlesmorethanacandle on January 31st, 2010 03:54 pm (UTC)
Aaaw, it was such a wonderful ficlet :)
Thank you; after writing a recent story, I felt there should be something like this.

And I love the way R2 backed up Padme's words with his whistling :P I bet he was saying rather colorful Alderanian curses :D
I don't think you could have R2 in a scene like this and it/he not say something - he's vocal every other scene he's in!

A shame, though, I couldn't remember at the time this was written if there were any colourful Alderaanian curses Padme could've used to interpret his whistles!

I don't know why, but I always choose this as a setting when I vid TPM Padme and Obi. It's just that this scene (had it actually existed) holds a lot of potential for cute and cheeky meetings between our OTP :D
It's a really great scene you can use in many different ways so I'm not surprised to learn you use that scene a lot in your vids!

To me, one of the great things about the scene is that you can use it again and again and it could be at a different time rather than that time in the movie.

Great job on the ficlet, darling :))
Thank you! I wasn't certain I did a good job with this one!
Armchair DMarmchairdm on February 1st, 2010 11:07 am (UTC)
Oh wow. This is... awesome.
F. J.: Golden Candlesmorethanacandle on February 1st, 2010 11:47 am (UTC)
Awesome? How so?
Armchair DM: Igor & Carson: Waitingarmchairdm on February 1st, 2010 01:56 pm (UTC)
I don't think I've ever read a fic before where the droids were used for anything besides plot devices. Not giving them personality...
F. J.: Golden Candlesmorethanacandle on February 1st, 2010 02:14 pm (UTC)
Ah, okay. Thank you.
emivemiv on February 4th, 2010 01:30 am (UTC)
Such a cute scene; it really made me smile, especially the ending! I love the playful tone of this one (a nice change of pace after just read Fight for Me!) I have always had a great weakness for them during this time—tPM or immediately after tPM—so much possibility there! Padmé’s dialogue with R2 was so sweet, and Obi-wan’s attitude seemed so typical of him, especially as a young man: very matter of fact and to the point.

The rag in her hand was filthy but the R2 unit’s domed head was sparkling.

A very clear first line; puts the reader right in the moment. :)

I like the title as well—very fitting. It may seem like a little thing, but titles are always so tricky for me that the good ones I read stand out!

You should definitely not shy away from more Obidala pieces in the time frame—I enjoyed this very much—delightful! :)
F. J.: Lanterns: Warmmorethanacandle on February 4th, 2010 10:16 am (UTC)
I love the playful tone of this one (a nice change of pace after just read Fight for Me!)
I’m very glad you read this one after Fight for me; I remember when I wrote that, I immediately wrote A very fair wake up call!, purely to cheer myself enough to head to bed. It wasn’t until I wrote this story that I felt very cheered – it was very playful, as you commented, which, I think, everyone needed after reading Fight for me. The playfulness was purely a defence after Fight for me.

Padmé’s dialogue with R2 was so sweet, and Obi-wan’s attitude seemed so typical of him, especially as a young man: very matter of fact and to the point.
I could easily envision younger Padmé having that dialogue with R2, and Obi-Wan when he comes along.

I wasn’t certain Obi-Wan was very much like tPM Obi-Wan – I haven’t watched the movie in a very long time!; it’s very nice to know that I managed to have him sound very Obi-Wan.

A very clear first line; puts the reader right in the moment. :)
Which your icon helped me do when I was writing this story!

I like the title as well—very fitting. It may seem like a little thing, but titles are always so tricky for me that the good ones I read stand out!
I’ve been having so much trouble with titles for these stories I’ve been writing lately so knowing that makes me so glad I used this title! I really had no idea what to call it until moments before I put the story here!

You should definitely not shy away from more Obidala pieces in the time frame—I enjoyed this very much—delightful! :)
I’ve been considering more stories within that time frame – I like it as an Obidala time period very well!

Thank you!